I'm going to tell Mrs. Burt that my mom doesn't want me to do anything that might rupture my hymen," Eleanor said. "For religious reasons.

He made her feel like more than the sum of her parts.

Puede que Park la hubiera paralizado con su magia ninja, con su toque vulcano y estuviera a punto de engullirla.
Seria alucinante.

I might not use capital letters. But I would definitely use an apostrophe…and probably a period. I’m a huge fan of punctuation.

He'd stopped trying to bring her back.

Park stood up when she got to their row, and as soon as she sat down, he took her hand and kissed it. It happened so fast, she didn't have time to die of ecstasy or embarrassment.